Sunday, July 24, 2011

Six Sunday

Turned out his biker brothers knew where there was a really nasty fight going
down that evening. So that’s how Derek ended up in a temporarily
converted warehouse on the wrong side of Harry Hines.

That’s when Fate smacked him upside the head.

When the first fighter stepped out, he was shocked to see it was a
twenty-something Latina woman. The bigger shock came with the
certainty that this girl was his King.

And she was terribly broken.
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11 comments:

  1. AnonymousJuly 24, 2011 at 10:27 AM

    Interesting last line, nice six.

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  2. AnonymousJuly 24, 2011 at 12:08 PM

    Nice six.

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  3. Karysa FaireJuly 24, 2011 at 1:16 PM

    Interesting. I like how Fate smacked him. :-)

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  4. E. P. BeaumontJuly 24, 2011 at 1:44 PM

    We like a nice twist, and this is it. Yes.

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  5. Monica Enderle PierceJuly 24, 2011 at 2:24 PM

    That last line really piqued my interest, and I like your tone. (Teeny-tiny nitpick: A Latina is a woman, so you really don't need 'woman'.) :)

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  6. BreeJuly 24, 2011 at 3:49 PM

    Nice surprise there. Interesting premise. Can't wait for more.

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  7. AlixJuly 24, 2011 at 6:34 PM

    I'm intrigued, fabulaous six!

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  8. DevinJuly 24, 2011 at 6:45 PM

    Ok you got me. I want to know more.

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  9. 1000th.monkeyJuly 24, 2011 at 7:14 PM

    The last two lines definitely give this a different flavour and hint at something pretty interesting on the horizon :)

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  10. Sandy NachlingerJuly 24, 2011 at 11:27 PM

    I loved this, especially because I'm very familiar with Harry Hines. My parents had a business on that street years ago! It's not exactly a garden spot (or it wasn't then.)

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  11. Jennifer WilckJuly 26, 2011 at 10:31 PM

    Good twist and makes me want to read more!

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